Halo The Fall of Poseidon

[SammichEaterPro]

Just scrolling through the posts.

 

[Great Mist]

UPDATE I am going to be posting on Saturday's with the Lobbies on Sunday due to I can work a whole week on it

 

[Great Mist]

A. Sorry I havent doing this since well I didnt feel like doing it during my time off. B. I will pick this back up on August 19th with Crash Landing and the sunday after that there will be 2 chapters added

 

[Absentduck]

Strange huh

 

[Noble Caravan Co.]

Tip: Make sure when you are doing broadcasts like you were doing or something similiar, make sure it sounds professional and sounds like it is from an actual transmission.
Example:
Mayday Mayday, This is Sierra 3717 of the UNSC Infinity. We have excessive casualties and wounded.
Requesting evacuation immediately from our position. We need medical attention and supplies ASAP.
Requesting to initiate Cole Protocol Sector three and orders for commence Defense Op.
Awaiting future orders.
Cody out.
Something like that. Unless you want it like the way you have it, that's fine.
Other than that, It sounds exciting and looking forward to it.

In dialogue, numbers are spelled out.

 

[Great Mist]

• evergreen948
  
• SammichEaterPro
  
• Fuzzle
  
• Cody3717
  
• WhiteWolfLegend
  
• Blue Carb0n
  
• Charles Stoot
• Great Mist 40
  
• FREEDOM COBRA
  
• Z0mbieK1ller27
  
• a bored teen
  
• Shakko17
  
• Krunkwitagun
• Hadokenchild
  
• heavypredator32
  
• EagleTitan99

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  Hello Guys I am picking the TFOP series back up so if you are interested go here

http://halocustoms.com/threads/sep-7-2013-flight-troubles-tfop-great-mist-40.13229/

 

[Great Mist]

In dialogue, numbers are spelled out.

FUCK

 

[Great Mist]

NEW CHAPTER WOOT

 

[Great Mist]

You wanted to know your mistakes, I just edited it instead. Edits are in green. Things you might want to consider rephrasing, due to lack of formality, or seeming out of place, are in purple. Things that don't really make sense, due to sentence structure, contradiction, or lack of given information, are highlighted in orange. I'll finish this in a later edit.

Alright I just copied and pasted this to word and when you do that later edit could you inbox me so it doesnt take as much space on the thread also thanks for the grammar corrections and before I end this I would like for you to delete this seeing how it takes up as much space as the actual story and it may be needed when I type the story into it

 

[Noble Caravan Co.]

Alright I just copied and pasted this to word and when you do that later edit could you inbox me so it doesnt take as much space on the thread also thanks for the grammar corrections and before I end this I would like for you to delete this seeing how it takes up as much space as the actual story and it may be needed when I type the story into it

Sure.

 

[Great Mist]

Sure.

Thanks Mate

 

[Fuzzle]

didnt get an alert for this

 

[Great Mist]

didnt get an alert for this

What do you mean friend?

 

[Fuzzle]

What do you mean friend?

was obviously tagged in this post but didnt get a notification for it

 

[Great Mist]

was obviously tagged in this post but didnt get a notification for it

Oh I see well do you what do you think of the Added chapter?

 

[Fuzzle]

Oh I see well do you what do you think of the Added chapter?

havent been following this as amuch as i wanted to sorry :/

 

[Great Mist]

havent been following this as amuch as i wanted to sorry :/

Meh its alright seeing how the lobby is going on right now it is going quite well. Right now we are on top of the ship fixing the wings and windshield.

 

[Great Mist]

I'm probably nuke this thread and try again sometime in the future

 

[Great Mist]

MockKnizzle I request a Nuke or Mockfuck. Either one will suffice

 

[MockKnizzle]

As you wish.